I am now back from the holiday and have started work on the documentary. I am pleased with my editing so far, using a slick and fast moving pace. I use lots of fast and sudden titles with no fade, saying things like "SO" and "THEN," which sometimes interrupt music. The music is quite upbeat and lively and in the narration I will talk quite fast and intend to make a few jokes. So far the general feedback has been that what I have done is effective.
I'm finding it hard to edit Marjan's speech to cut out important parts of it; it is very long and she talks about quite a lot of different things. Also, she talks quite slowly and explains some things in a lot of detail so it is hard to find certain chunks which would work well.